After we have written the jokes, our next tasks are:
Set up lines:
The first thing Johnny Carson taught his new writers was to
end their jokes on the laugh.
Most often repeated sequence of lines in the movies?
HERO: Let's go. (HERO'S HENCHMEN ANSWER WITH A GRUNT.) (ALL EXIT.) Next scene: much action, little dialogue, etc. Do you recognize this scene? You have been to the movies before? |
Another common problem: when we are trying out jokes for the first time, we get to the punch line.
But the audience laughs before we get
to the end . . ..
They got ahead.
Like friends
interrupting, they understood the joke
earlier.
Usually, we just mistakenly placed the punch word in the middle of the line. Probably because it made grammatical sense. But people neither speak nor think in strict accordance to the rules of grammar. So, we must edit and re-write for the logic of the laugh alone.
You will find yourself developing a poetic sense for re- arranging your words. A renewed study and appreciation of prosody, the art of versification which includes the study of metrical structures, rhyme, etc., would serve all speakers and comics well. In any case, put in simple terms, you will definitely have fun making sure to end on the punch word.
When writing, draw a bull's-eye around the elusive punch word:
Forces us to end on a punch.
Circle a word in the middle of the sentence?
Sure it is the punch word?
Now, what?
That's correct: re-write!
Get the punch word at the end . . .. Topper:
Second topper:
Both toppers create the illusion of improvisation for the audience.
Jack Douglas, a member of Bob Hope's monologue writing team, was interviewed by Larry Wilde in Wilde's How the Great Comedians Create Laughter, p. 151: Jack winks, then says,
"The two toppers sound like ad-libs. It's the greatest thing for an audience to think you haven't got a routine, that you're doing it all off the top of your head."
Basically, some members of the audience might feel that they could have come up
with our one-liner. But, just sitting there listening to us,
even the most arrogant among them will admit: no. Even they wouldn't have
had enough time to take it further by coming up with the two
toppers. The speaker or comic has worked six months to a year getting
his act together, and testing it in front of live audiences. Our
next audience does not know, nor does it want to know this behind-
the-scenes information. They are looking for magic, not facts.
Since the speaker-comedian-magician appears to have just invented
the toppers, the audience is stunned. They assume he is a genius
at thinking on his feet. Jim will often use the conventional boxing metaphor for
stand-up comedy to reinforce teaching points. Angelo
Dundee, famous boxing coach to Mohammed Ali and Sugar Ray
Leonard, in his biography Jim wondered what that meant.
I Only Talk Winning, reveals
the first note he gives a boxer new to his training camp:
So, in 1990 Jim visited As the fighter gently
put it,
To illustrate the greater effectiveness of hitting
someone twice, when you might have thought once would do, we now
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